#4. (Re-Write Different Format)
time goes by without my knowledge
the day is bright and young yet I feel old and frail
weighed down by the constant call of school work
i look across the road
in plain sight are two young boys jumping in leave piles
i have a constant reminder of the simple joys i now miss
where has the time gone?
what is to come for me in the future?
take me back to the days of my youth
time goes by without my knowledge
the day is bright and young yet I feel old and frail
weighed down by the constant call of school work
i look across the road
in plain sight are two young boys jumping in leave piles
i have a constant reminder of the simple joys i now miss
where has the time gone?
what is to come for me in the future?
take me back to the days of my youth
I like this a lot. The only suggestion that I have is to perhaps describe the boys jumping in the leaves with a little bit more sadness/description, so that the reader has a better sense of what you miss about your childhood.
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